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December 24, 2014 • Leave a Comment
by Nicholas Kerkhoff 3 out of 5 Stars
This book is currently available for free on Amazon.
The story is set in a fantasy world with magic following the adventures of two brothers who are sent off by their father to apprentice with a necromancer. The story idea sounded interesting and I like zombies so I decided to give it a shot. The Kindle formatting could be worked on. Page breaks would help keep the chapters from starting at the end of other chapters. The book could use a copy editor, too. I found several missing words, misused words, redundancies, and confusing sentences. For example: “There’s lots opportunity in the east” missing “of” and determiner agreement is incorrect, “The most disconcerting part were its wide open eyes” should be “was”, “and let out a deep and wheezy low.” that’s where the sentence ends. What was deep and wheezy? Another one, “A cousin though marriage only.” a misused word, and the last example,”The boys didn’t know if they’d left either; there when the brothers went off bed, and the cold seemed not to affect them.” a very confusing sentence with missing words and misused words such as affect. Despite these errors, some sections of the book were well written and drew me in to the story, for a while.
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